This poem was written for the #3lineThursday challenge and received an Honorable Mention nod. Judge’s Thoughts below are courtesy of the generous Janelle Segarra.
Octane charged recriminations spew
Spittle seasoned with resentment and Bourbon peppers us
Psyches blister, lose another layer
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“I CHOSE THIS POEM FOR ITS FERVOR AND INTENSITY. I WAS PULLED IN BY THE STRONG WORDING AND IMMENSELY POWERFUL IMAGERY. I LOVE THE WAY THE FIRST TWO LINES ARE IGNITED, HOWEVER , THE LAST LINE SEEMS TO ADMIT THE COMING OF DEFEAT. THAT LAST LINE ESSENTIALLY RELINQUISHES A BIT OF THE POWER DISPLAYED IN LINES ONE AND TWO. THE FIRST TWO LINES ARE BLATANTLY VISUAL WHEREAS THE LAST LINE IS MORE POETICALLY EXPLANATORY IN THAT YOU CANNOT ACTUALLY SEE A PSYCHES DAMAGE AND LOSE A LAYER BUT YOU UNDERSTAND THAT BECAUSE OF THE ACTIONS IN LINES ONE AND TWO, LINE THREE IS THE UNWANTED BUT NATURAL OUTCOME. THE FIRST TWO LINES ARE CONTENTIOUS WHICH TYPICALLY SIGNIFIES THE PASSION AND HOPE ARE STILL THERE, CONVERSELY THOUGH, THAT LAST LINE INFORMS US THAT LAYERS HAVE PREVIOUSLY BEEN LOST, AND WITH THIS FIERY EXCHANGE, ANOTHER IS LOST. ONE CAN GATHER THAT THERE AREN’T MANY LAYERS LEFT TO LOSE.”
JUDGE’S THOUGHTS
What inspired it?
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Thanks for reading! The first thing that came to mind was hurtful words when I saw the image. Arguments can leave one feeling burned I guess.
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True. 🙂 Great piece.
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Thank you!
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Incendiary and painful! Very evocative of the power that language has, whether spoken or written. What a scorcher!
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Thanks E!
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I loved your poem and am glad I had the chance to read it for TLT. 🙂
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful review!
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thank YOU for your inspiring words 🙂
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